Changes in my life сочинение
Обновлено: 06.07.2024
If I could change one thing in the world, what would I change?
I would change the nature of a man so that there are no wars, that people live in peace, that would be less negative experience.
Some people have a bad character. They beat people, animals, speak bad words. But why? What do they want to show other people? I want to change their character so that people love each other, animals and do not say bad words. A person’s character changes with age, but how it changes depends on which family, circulation the person grew up in.
Some people believe in a horoscope and think that their character depends on it. In fact, the character depends on the inner mood - will it be good or negative. German psychologist E. Kretschmer thinks that the character is divided into three types: asthenics are reserved people, serious, stubborn; athletics - calm, restrained, practical and picnics - sociable, contact and emotional.
I divide people into two types - soft, kind and nervous, evil.
People show their character in art, in writing and in words. Relations of relatives and friends depend on our character. Bad character traits often prevent us from living, so we need to look for good character traits in ourselves and learn the bad ones to slowly forget. In order to have a good character you must have such adjectives: creative, kind, friendly, attentive. But if your character is capricious, callous, evil, then most likely you have a negative character.
But do people want to change their character? Can they live with their character for the better ? Thanks to the research, I learned that 88% want to change their character for the better, and 10% do not want to change their character. 2% of people heard from relatives and friends that they have an ideal character. I've met a lot of people in my life and everyone has their own character. Some have a good character, some like asthenics have an average, and very rarely people with a bad character. The theme of my composition is to urge all people to be sociable, kind, creative and try to change your character for the better.
As Victor Hugo said, “Every person has three characters: the one that he is credited with, the one that he ascribes to himself and the one that is in reality.
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Topic: Changes in my daily life/lifestle (examen oral) I am going to speak about changes in my daily life. My life has changed very much. One of the most important change was when I lost my job. I thought : "it will change my life" But I was wrong. The biggest change was the birth of my children because marked all my life. When I was single and without children I used to go out with my boyfriend and my friends. Now I usually go with my children. Also I used to go at gym becuse I like to do exercise, but when I had my daughter I left the gym for ever. Also I used to see my friends once a week but today they and I have children and we can´t do the same. But I think that it is the best phase of my life. It´s true, I can eat slowly or enjoy the meal, but they are the most important. I would leave anything for them. On other hand, I have changed a lot of things in my lifestyle. For example I gave up smoking, I try to eat more healthy .
Topic: Changes in my daily life/lifestle (examen oral)
I am going to speak about changes in my daily life.
My life has changed very much. One of the most important change s was when I lost my job. I thought : "it will change my life, " b ut I was wrong.
The biggest change was the birth of my children because marked (I don't understand) all my life.
When I was single and without children I used to go out with my boyfriend and my friends. Now I usually go with my children.
Also I used to go at to gym becuse because I like to do exercise, but when I had my daughter I left the gym for ever forever.
Also I used to see my friends once a week but today they and I we have children and we can´t do the same.
But I think that it is the best phase of my life.
It´s true, I can 't eat slowly or enjoy the meal, but they are the most important.
I wouldn 't leave anything for them.
On other hand, I have changed a lot of things in my lifestyle. For example I gave up smoking, I try to eat more healthy .
Topic: Changes in my daily life/lifestle (examen oral)
I am going to speak about changes in my daily life.
My life has changed very much. One of the most important changes was when I lost my job. I thought : "it will change my life" it would change my life, but I was wrong.
The biggest change was the birth of my children because it marked impacted(?) all my life.
When I was single and without children I used to go out with my boyfriend and my friends. Now I usually go out with my children.
Also I used to go at to the gym becuse I like to do exercise, but when I had my daughter I left the gym forever.
Also I used to see my friends once a week, but today they and I we all have children and we can´t do the same that anymore.
But Nevertheless, I think that it is the best phase of my life.
It´s true, I can eat slowly or enjoy the meal, but they are the most important.
I would leave anything for them.
On other hand, I have changed a lot of things in my lifestyle. For example I gave up smoking, and I try to eat more healthy.
Если занимаетесь английским самостоятельно, очень рекомендую не просто пролистать, а сделать упражнения самим. Понимание принципов построения текста и умение манипулировать формами слов дает огромный простор для маневра. И, конечно, в итоге улучшает навыки написания эссе – не только в IELTS, но и любых других.
Преподавателю на заметку: ровно то же самое можно использовать на своих уроках. И это полезно не только тем, кто собирается сдавать IELTS. Правда, уровень все же должен быть соответствующим - не ниже Intermediate.
IELTS эссе. Тема Change
Итак, тема IELTS эссе у нас нынче такая:
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Сегодня я не буду документировать мыслительный процесс, который привел к такому эссе. Предварительные заметки и способы составления плана сочинения мы уже видели в предыдущем посте об IELTS эссе.
Еще в этот раз я, коварная, не дам сразу готовое эссе. Сконструируем его сами из готовых, но перепутанных предложений. Возможен только один вариант текста. Почему так категорично? Потому что главное качество грамотно написанного текста/эссе – связность. Одно ведет к другому мысль невозможно прокрутить назад и тесно переплетено друг с другом: внутри предложения, между предложениями, между параграфами.
IELTS эссе состоит из 4 параграфов:
- Вступление
- Параграф - первая точка зрения
- Параграф - вторая точка зрения
- Заключение
Перетаскиванием предложений составьте связное и логичное эссе IELTS:
- If it had not been for innovations, we would still be living in caves and enjoying the stability of the Stone Age.
- Some people believe that a certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate.
- At the same time I believe that life is the synonym for continuous change, so resisting it is highly unproductive.
- Following the same routine on a daily basis helps them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities.
- I have to admit that any alterations might feel threatening.
- However, people’s attitudes to change differ in many ways.
- It can also be argued that minor changes, such as choosing a different route to work or a new sort of coffee every day, are as important as major ones.
- These people value traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind.
- Change is, undoubtedly, an essential part of life, and the humankind would not have evolved without it.
- They point to the fact that all great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways and transformed life for the better.
- In conclusion, I personally think that, although it may be hard and uncomfortable at times, making changes is vital both for personal development and for the evolution of the human race.
- This, in turn, provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals.
- These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly, living.
- On the other hand, change is regarded as an inconvenience by others.
Прочитать эссе IELTS целиком.
Change is, undoubtedly, an essential part of life, and the humankind would not have evolved without it. However, people’s attitudes to change differ in many ways.
Some people believe that a certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate. They point to the fact that all great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways and transformed life for the better. If it had not been for innovations, we would still be living in caves and enjoying the stability of the Stone Age. It can also be argued that minor changes, such as choosing a different route to work or a new sort of coffee every day, are as important as major ones. These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly, living. This, in turn, provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals.
On the other hand, change is regarded as an inconvenience by others. These people value traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind. Following the same routine on a daily basis helps them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities.
In conclusion, I personally think that, although it may be hard and uncomfortable at times, making changes is vital both for personal development and for the evolution of the human race. I have to admit that any alterations might feel threatening. At the same time I believe that life is the synonym for continuous change, so resisting it is highly unproductive.
Связность текста
А теперь займемся связностью текста (cohesion). Напомню на всякий случай, что средств связности текста – громадье. Есть грамматические, есть лексические. Сейчас из всего многообразия выберем тематические/лексические поля, местоимения, замену слов на one/ones. Остальное трогать не будем (союзы, артикли, эллипсис и др.).
Найдем в этом IELTS эссе слова и выражения, связанные со следующими понятиями:
Change is, undoubtedly, an essential part of life, and the humankind would not have evolved without it. However, people’s attitudes to change differ in many ways.
Some people believe that a certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate . They point to the fact that all great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways and transformed life for the better. If it had not been for innovations , we would still be living in caves and enjoying the stability of the Stone Age. It can also be argued that minor changes , such as choosing a different route to work or a new sort of coffee every day, are as important as major ones. These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly, living. This, in turn, provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals.
On the other hand, change is regarded as an inconvenience by others. These people value traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind. Following the same routine on a daily basis helps them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities.
In conclusion, I personally think that, although it may be hard and uncomfortable at times, making changes is vital both for personal development and for the evolution of the human race. I have to admit that any alterations might feel threatening . At the same time I believe that life is the synonym for continuous change , so resisting it is highly unproductive .
Вот и лексическая связность текста: мы используем синонимы и разнообразные способы перефразирования, избегаем ненужных повторов.
А явное наличие тематических полей доказывает то, что мы пишем по теме (вернитесь к формулировке задания и посмотрите, какие слова из каких тематических полей там), а не поменяли ее под шумок.
Теперь посмотрим на местоимения и замену слов на one/ones. Выберите из вариантов a, b, c нужное слово/фразу, к которой ведет местоимение (это называется pronoun referencing):
Change is, undoubtedly, an essential part of life, and the humankind would not have evolved without it . humankind;an essential part of life;change 3
Some people believe that a certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate. They point to the fact that all great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways. some variation;some people;traditional ways 2
It can also be argued that minor changes, such as choosing a different route to work or a new sort of coffee every day, are as important as major ones . changes;route;coffee 1
These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly, living. changes;choosing a different sort of coffee or route;people 2
This , in turn, provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals. living;thinking;not being taken over by routine ways 3
On the other hand, change is regarded as an inconvenience by others . other people;other variations;routine ways 1
These people value traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind. change;traditional approach;stability 2
Following the same routine on a daily basis helps them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities. stability and peace of mind;distractions;other people 3
In conclusion, I personally think that, although it may be hard and uncomfortable at times, making changes is vital. making changes;avoiding distractions;following the same routine 1
At the same time I believe that life is the synonym for continuous change, so resisting it is highly unproductive. change;life;the synonym 1
Проверили себя? И для наглядности даже стрелочки нарисую, чтобы видно было, что к чему относится и куда ведет:
Итак, эти средства связности текста (тематические поля, синонимы, местоимения и слова one/ones) помогают избежать ненужных повторов слов и собрать текст в единое целое.
А еще то, что мы сейчас проделали, называется лингвистический анализ текста, если точнее – его часть.
Словообразование в английском языке
Теперь займемся метаморфозами. Попробуем перефразировать каждое предложение эссе, используя другую форму слова. Например, в оригинальном тексте:
А мы перефразируем undoubtedly и напишем:
Здесь тоже все достаточно однозначно: разные части речи и формы одного слова могут находиться только в определенных структурах и позициях в предложении.
Перефразируйте предложения, изменяя форму слова на нужную:
1. Change is, undoubtedly, an essential part of life.
= Without a doubt , change is an essential part of life.
2. The humankind would not have evolved without it.
= The evolution of the humankind would have been impossible without it.
3. People’s attitudes to change differ in many ways.
= People have different attitudes to change.
4. A certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate.
= A certain amount of variation is necessary in order to avoid stagnation .
5. All great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways and transformed life for the better.
= All great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways and brought life-changing transformations .
6. If it had not been for innovations, we would still be living in caves and enjoying the stability of the Stone Age.
= If it hadn’t been for innovative approaches, we would still be enjoying a stable life in caves.
7. Minor changes are as important as major ones.
= Minor changes possess the same degree of importance as major ones.
8. These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly, living.
= These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, what is more important , living.
9. This, in turn, provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals.
= This, in turn, provides an opportunity for personal development and evolution .
10. Change is regarded as an inconvenience by others.
= Change is regarded to be inconvenient by others.
11. These people value traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind.
= These people attach a great value to traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind.
12. Following the same routine on a daily basis helps them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities.
= Following the same routine every day helps them not be become distracted and, instead, focus on priorities.
13. It may be hard and uncomfortable at times.
= It may be hard and bring discomfort at times.
14. Any alterations might feel threatening.
= Any alterations might feel like a threat .
15. Resisting it is highly unproductive.
= Resistance is highly unproductive.
Словообразование – тоже очень полезная штука. Из одного слова можно сделать несколько и свободно ими пользоваться. Можно менять структуру предложения, как вам заблагорассудится, и не ограничивать полет фантазии строгими рамками. Зачем менять структуру предложений? Снова по той же причине – чтобы избежать повторов. Только выше мы говорили про повторы слов, а сейчас про грамматические повторы, избыток которых смотрится невыигрышно и оценивается очень невысоко. То есть, такой например, фрагмент не получит высокого балла на IELTS:
Some people think that change is always positive. They believe that change brings multiple benefits. Others feel that change is a threat. They claim that change results in discomfort and confusion.
Несмотря на приличную лексику (за исключением повтора слова change) и правильную грамматику, все предложения написаны по одной модели.
Повторы и связность
Ну и напоследок, попробуем применить все, о чем мы говорили, на практике и прокачаем навыки письма IELTS эссе. Текст ниже – кошмарный кошмар, с которым нужно срочно что-то делать. Что именно? Переписать и избавиться от повторов – либо с помощью местоимений, либо синонимов, либо слов из того же тематического поля. Подсказка: нужные места зачеркнуты.
Change is, undoubtedly, an essential part of life, and the humankind would not have evolved without change it . However, people’s attitudes to change differ in many ways.
Some people believe that change a certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate. Some people They point to the fact that all great changes inventions and breakthroughs once changed challenged traditional ways and changed transformed life for the better. If it had not been for change innovations , we would still be living in caves and enjoying the stability of the Stone Age. It can also be argued that minor changes, such as choosing a different route to work or a new sort of coffee every day, are as important as major changes ones . These changes variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly, living. Not being taken over by routine ways of thinking and living This , in turn, provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals.
On the other hand, change is regarded as an inconvenience by other people others . Other These people value traditional approach and view traditional approach it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind. Following the same routine on a daily basis helps other people them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities.
In conclusion, I personally think that, although making changes it may be hard and uncomfortable at times, making changes is vital both for personal development and for the evolution of the human race. I have to admit that any changes alterations might feel threatening. At the same time I believe that life is the synonym for continuous change, so resisting change it is highly unproductive.
Связки и клише для IELTS эссе
Можно еще посмотреть на союзы, связки и клише, пригодные для использования в других IELTS эссе подобного типа:
Change is, undoubtedly , an essential part of life, and the humankind would not have evolved without it. However , people’s attitudes to change differ in many ways .
Some people believe that a certain amount of variation is necessary in order not to stagnate. They point to the fact that all great inventions and breakthroughs once challenged traditional ways and transformed life for the better. If it had not been for innovations, we would still be living in caves and enjoying the stability of the Stone Age. It can also be argued that minor changes, such as choosing a different route to work or a new sort of coffee every day, are as important as major ones. These variations help people not to be taken over by routine ways of thinking and, more importantly , living. This, in turn , provides an opportunity to develop and evolve as individuals.
On the other hand , change is regarded as an inconvenience by others . These people value traditional approach and view it as a pre-requisite for stability and peace of mind. Following the same routine on a daily basis helps them to avoid distractions and focus on priorities.
In conclusion, I personally think that , although it may be hard and uncomfortable at times, making changes is vital both for personal development and for the evolution of the human race. I have to admit that any alterations might feel threatening. At the same time I believe that life is the synonym for continuous change, so resisting it is highly unproductive.
Преподавателям на заметку: это эссе и все упражнения по тренировке навыков письма, средств связности текста и словообразования можно скачать бесплатно и пользоваться на своих уроках:
Подробнее о том, как научиться писать эссе IELTS, откуда брать идеи и как развивать навыки спонтанного мышления.
Подробнее о том, как улучшить свой балл за IELTS всего за одну неделю.
I have never met people who could speak about his future life with confidence. For me it was also difficult few months ago. But now I realized that our life depends only on us.
My future job I hope will be connected with foreign languages. I want to go to linguistic university after school and start to study two more languages. Most probably they will German and Chinese. My future job will be connected with languages but what exactly I want to do I am still not sure. Maybe interpreter or secretary. Also I would like to travel in future.
Another thing, whatever is gonna happen to me I am sure I will always support my family. I want to spend as much time as possible with them. I want to celebrate family holidays together, make surprises for them, give them presents and support with money.
I am very quiet person and so far I am not planning my relationships. Of course in future I would like to have children and husband, but for now my priority is my education. I believe there is a particular person for everyone and one day I will sure meet him and we will be happy.
Friends will be also very important for me. Now I have many fellows and friends but time change people and only future will show who my real friends are. These people will be important same as my family.
I see my life with ups and downs, some problems and achievements. I know that in future I will meet good and bad people. But all these things will help me to learn on my mistakes. Maybe now all my dreams look little strange and funny but this is what I really want in future.
Моё будущее
Я ещё не встречала людей, которые могли бы спокойно и уверенно говорить о своём будущем. Для меня это тоже было сложно несколько месяцев назад. А сейчас я поняла, что наша жизнь зависит только от нас.
Моя будущая работа, надеюсь, будет связана с иностранными языками. Я мечтаю поступить в лингвистический университет после школы и начать изучать ещё 2 языка. Скорее всего, это будут немецкий и китайский языки. Моя будущая профессия будет связана с языками, но чем именно я буду заниматься, пока не знаю. Может переводчиком буду или секретарем. А ещё я бы хотела путешествовать в будущем.
Ещё одна вещь крайне важна: что бы со мной не случилось и куда бы судьба не занесла, уверена, что всегда буду поддерживать свою семью. Я хочу проводить как можно больше времени с ними. Хочу отмечать семейные праздники вместе, делать сюрпризы для них, дарить подарки и помогать материально.
Я очень спокойный человек и пока что не планирую никакие серьезные отношения. Конечно, в будущем я хочу иметь собственную семью, детей и мужа, но пока что на первом месте у меня образование. Я верю, что у каждого человека есть своя половинка и однажды мы обязательно встретимся и будем счастливы. Друзья также будут очень важны для меня. Сейчас у меня много знакомых и приятелей, но так как время меняет людей, только будущее покажет, кто настоящий друг. Эти люди также важны, как и семья.
Я знаю, что моя жизнь будет полна взлетов и падений, будут проблемы и достижения. И знаю, что в будущем встречу как хороших, так и плохих людей. Но все это поможет мне извлечь полезный урок жизни. Возможно мои мечты выглядят немного странными или смешными, но это именно то, к чему я стремлюсь.
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